A new take on Apple Picking

A more concrete version of the apple picking haiku. I plan over the week to play with the verbal clips and try a few different versions—see what feels right. This feels like it's missing something big.

I put ambient orchard noise below the track to make it sound fuller/ without awkward dead pauses.

Indian Summer

A new riff on the ducks haiku I posted earlier, this one includes some crunching leaves and a few words about beautiful fall days. Feedback appreciated. Thank you,

Steph

Just Clips, super Rough

Okay so here's the problem... I have spent all week editing down and editing down clips of two really cute kids picking apples. I'd like some feedback at this point to figure out which clips are particularly strong.

After that perhaps I can apply a structure that involves more picking sounds and field recording from the orchard. I'm looking for the strongest clip or two that can fill the haiku space without having too many words.

Clearly I am at a super rough point and will be working all weekend—Steph