A new riff on the ducks haiku I posted earlier, this one includes some crunching leaves and a few words about beautiful fall days. Feedback appreciated. Thank you,
Stephanie, This is close. I might try spacing out the birds at the end -- say one quack before the last line, and then the groups of quacks at the end for punctuation. Also, where did you record the voice over? It sounds like there's interior room tone that comes in and out. I'd love to hear a read recorded outside...
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Stephanie,
ReplyDeleteThis is close. I might try spacing out the birds at the end -- say one quack before the last line, and then the groups of quacks at the end for punctuation. Also, where did you record the voice over? It sounds like there's interior room tone that comes in and out. I'd love to hear a read recorded outside...
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